Response to Georgia Clay

Yeah I think you should make this like the draft for workshop. It really is how someone would describe the last memory they had before getting killed; all the details and I just felt in the moment. My favorite image was "my fingers glided like soaped tiles against my cheeks". You're really good at doing subjective point of views you make the reader feel like it's actually them standing in the rain reliving and it and I felt like I died. It's really great man.